Ooh, you did it! And I love it! (And believe me, I hear you about a seemingly simple plot going all rabid and demanding -- it's why I'm still working on your Running Hot story.)

"So is this the part where we cry into the camera about how scared we are?" -- lmfao.

And I love Neal being unable to sleep because it's too quiet. I actually know city-dwellers who've had that very problem when confronted with true silence at night. :)

Also fabulous: the noisy stretching during fishing. Even when Neal's mouth is shut, he makes noise. Bloody hilarious.

Very cute -- and nicely done! Thank you very much!