I think I might know which fic you're talking about, but then, maybe not. If it is, I get what you're saying in your comments, still, it's not a bad story, again, that's assuming it's the story/WIP I'm thinking of.

Am I being vague enough? I'm trying to be because while I like her story, yours is indeed more detailed and has more layers and is better. But I always want to encourage new authors so unless I just dislike a story, my feedback will always be positive, though tempered according to what I find.

Uuum... what I'm trying to say, and not very successfully, is that I might know the story you're talking about, and I am enjoying yours and hers, but get what you're seeing as lacking.

Okay. Shutting up now.