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"Maj unconsciously picked at the brush end of her waist-length braid of winter-gray hair as she stared through the display window at the little contingent of heavy bodied young men in thick coats get their rear-ends handed to them by a scrawny, ragged, dirty, dark haired man who was proving the more adept fighter. Where as the boys lunged without thought, the man reacted as though with thought. He had technique, like someone trained to fight, and that made the old woman arch an eyebrow curiously."
The interesting thing about hound of Hell you Cry is the direction it took without me fully realizing it - Sheppard having lost his mom, Maj having lost her son and the two of them coming together filling a void neither had realized was there. I kind of wish that I had explored that more deeply, but as is I am content with it.
Of all the OCs I came up with, Maj is my favorite. She was fun to write. She's old, she's wise, and watching the skinny but determined Sheppard take on a gang of strong, healthy thugs intrigues her. Besides the fact that Sheppard is standing up to himself and is more than he appears, there's a good chance Maj sees some of herself in Sheppard as well. She immediately likes him without even knowing him.
sharpes_hussy who wanted commentary on this snippet."Maj unconsciously picked at the brush end of her waist-length braid of winter-gray hair as she stared through the display window at the little contingent of heavy bodied young men in thick coats get their rear-ends handed to them by a scrawny, ragged, dirty, dark haired man who was proving the more adept fighter. Where as the boys lunged without thought, the man reacted as though with thought. He had technique, like someone trained to fight, and that made the old woman arch an eyebrow curiously."
The interesting thing about hound of Hell you Cry is the direction it took without me fully realizing it - Sheppard having lost his mom, Maj having lost her son and the two of them coming together filling a void neither had realized was there. I kind of wish that I had explored that more deeply, but as is I am content with it.
Of all the OCs I came up with, Maj is my favorite. She was fun to write. She's old, she's wise, and watching the skinny but determined Sheppard take on a gang of strong, healthy thugs intrigues her. Besides the fact that Sheppard is standing up to himself and is more than he appears, there's a good chance Maj sees some of herself in Sheppard as well. She immediately likes him without even knowing him.
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Date: 2009-11-22 04:14 am (UTC)From:It was great.
Thank you for validating what I was feeling when I read it.
I am so glad you liked Maj so much. I did too and also her
little Ris........who came to love Sheppard too.
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Date: 2009-11-22 05:09 am (UTC)From:Which one is next? I'd love to hear one for Wrong End of the Leash...
This is one of my fav fics, as well. It was very well done!
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Date: 2009-11-22 05:20 am (UTC)From:So pick a snippet between that word count and I'll do commentary :D
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Date: 2009-11-22 05:38 am (UTC)From:The part where John discovers he's really small, where he finds out the creatures are sentient and think he's a pet, and when his 'friend' pulls him out of the hole in the wall when John's badly injured. I think the last part I'm curious about the most. He was so, so gentle with John and his injuries...
Just a really lovely, memorable fic! I think it was the very first fic of yours that I read. You hooked me then!! Not that I've been fighting to get off that hook....
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Date: 2009-11-22 05:50 am (UTC)From:That's bad.
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Date: 2009-11-22 05:52 am (UTC)From:Ouch.
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