This was such a sweet piece of hurt/comfort! Love the emotional whump at the beginning (and later on the physical one, too of course *g*). Neal reflecting on everyone else's thoughts on why he hates violence was a nice way to deal with it - and then he thinks he might agree with Keller of all people that he's a coward – aw, poor Neal! This also fits in nicely with the part where his fight or flight instinct, which is really more of a flight instinct, didn't kick in at the beginning (well, at the scene before the beginning), but then later on he has to put up a fight to get out. His fighting technique makes a lot of sense, especially because it's really something he's not good at, but natural instinct to survive takes over and through it all he also has to fall back on Mozzie's and Diana's advice *g*. The fight part of the equation, the following escape, which is what Neal is good at after all, was really intense and the suspense came across really well. I was really feeling his emotions through that scene. I also love how he comes back to what Peter would say, and even the question: what would he have done? Which is not 'nothing to help the kids' - I'm glad they didn't die, though, because Neal was beating himself up over it enough already that they got hurt. And the comfort part of the story was very nicely done, too. The scene when Neal wakes up and panics is so cute! I really like how Peter is able to calm him down. And all of this woven into the catching-the-bad-guys storyline (Phillip was such a great villain!) All in all this is really beautifully done and I had a great time reading it.
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Date: 2011-11-01 07:23 am (UTC)From:Love the emotional whump at the beginning (and later on the physical one, too of course *g*).
Neal reflecting on everyone else's thoughts on why he hates violence was a nice way to deal with it - and then he thinks he might agree with Keller of all people that he's a coward – aw, poor Neal!
This also fits in nicely with the part where his fight or flight instinct, which is really more of a flight instinct, didn't kick in at the beginning (well, at the scene before the beginning), but then later on he has to put up a fight to get out. His fighting technique makes a lot of sense, especially because it's really something he's not good at, but natural instinct to survive takes over and through it all he also has to fall back on Mozzie's and Diana's advice *g*.
The fight part of the equation, the following escape, which is what Neal is good at after all, was really intense and the suspense came across really well. I was really feeling his emotions through that scene.
I also love how he comes back to what Peter would say, and even the question: what would he have done? Which is not 'nothing to help the kids' - I'm glad they didn't die, though, because Neal was beating himself up over it enough already that they got hurt.
And the comfort part of the story was very nicely done, too. The scene when Neal wakes up and panics is so cute! I really like how Peter is able to calm him down.
And all of this woven into the catching-the-bad-guys storyline (Phillip was such a great villain!) All in all this is really beautifully done and I had a great time reading it.