Help!

[kriadydragon]

Attention Thoughtcrimes fans! I need help with a plot.

I want to do a story in which Freya discovers that something unpleasent is happening to Brendan. I wanted to do something along the lines of Brendan in the hospital and maybe a nurse mistreating him or not taking care of him right, but neither Brendan nor anyone else is aware except for Freya. But I want to do it in a way that's plausible and not like I'm dissing the nursing profession or something.

Anyone know how I could accomplish a plot like this? Or know of another way I could pull it off? I was also thinking that Brendan is healing at home and a relative or someone who's supposed to be taking care of him isn't. The thing is, it has to be that Brendan isn't aware of it.

My brain refuses to work the problem out. I need help. Know what I could do to make such a plot work?

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[kriadydragon.livejournal.com]

I actually have something like that going on in a longer TC fic I'm working on (except the fake nurse is after someone else). I'm looking for something more simple because I want this to be a one-shot. I need to cut back on chapter fics for a while. the slave one nearly killed me.